Comments on: “In the Lines of Our Palms” by Jimmy Pianka http://freehandzine.com/in-the-lines-of-our-palms-by-jimmy-pianka/ A Literary Zine Thu, 04 Feb 2010 23:50:20 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.1 hourly 1 By: Mike http://freehandzine.com/in-the-lines-of-our-palms-by-jimmy-pianka/comment-page-1/#comment-3 Mike Tue, 10 Feb 2009 22:59:16 +0000 http://freehandzine.com/?p=22#comment-3 I really enjoyed this piece; its theme reminds me of Pablo Neruda's "Poetry" but with a modern update. I feel in particular that the first and last lines are striking. If I had one suggestion it would be that the Kool Aid reference felt out of place to me. It's an odd analogy in a piece that references things that are less "pop" culture, like David and Pinnochio. I hope I get to read more of your work. Mike I really enjoyed this piece; its theme reminds me of Pablo Neruda’s “Poetry” but with a modern update. I feel in particular that the first and last lines are striking.

If I had one suggestion it would be that the Kool Aid reference felt out of place to me. It’s an odd analogy in a piece that references things that are less “pop” culture, like David and Pinnochio.

I hope I get to read more of your work.

Mike

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